Final Judgment

So for the past little while, I've been trying to write a book because I'm secretly hoping that I can become an author one of these days.  I've hit some snags, but am currently working them out.  For now though, I could use all the criticism that I can get.  So, I'd appreciate any advice you can give me on it.  Don't tell me how great it is, just judge it. . . harshly.

It's already too long to post as one blog entry so, here's the prolouge for you.  Does it sound like something you'd like to read?

Prologue

"In other news, another kidnapping has been reported, this time in a small neighborhood in Colorado.  Neighbors notified authorities at about three o'clock on Tuesday, when they heard gunshots coming from the home of a Mr. and Mrs. Brian Richardson.  Police were immediately dispatched to investigate the situation, but upon entering the home, found only the bodies of Mr. and Mrs. Richardson.  Their daughter, sixteen year old Kelsi Richardson was missing.  Police believe that she was taken from the home shortly after the deaths of her parents." Said the blonde reporter, flashing her perfect, white set of teeth for the hundredth time.

"Kelsi's whereabouts are currently unknown, but police believe that this will give us some new insights as to what is currently happening all over the nation.  Bob, do you have any more information on this sudden string of kidnappings?"

The camera zoomed out to revel an older man, perhaps in his forties, smiling at the blonde news reporter.

"As a matter of fact Nancy, I do."  He said, turning to face the camera which then zoomed in on his wrinkling face.  "Kelsi's disappearance this week is not unique.  Nine other kidnappings have been reported all around the country.  Among the missing are; Kyle and Sara Martin from Springville, Utah, Lily Trent from Phoenix, Arizona, Julie Douglas from Dayton, Ohio, Matthew Adams from Scottsbluff, Nebraska, Eric Jenson from San Antonio, Texas, Jenny Reid from Norfolk, Virginia, Sam Tyson from Miami, Florida and John Himen from Seattle, Washington.

"Experts have been baffled by this seemingly random string of disappearances.  As far as they can tell, the kidnappers don't have any set objective.  No ransom notes have been delivered, no calls have been made, and most puzzling of all, no bodies have been found.  It's as if all these teens have just disappeared."

The camera zoomed out to show both reporters , and Nancy began speaking again.

"If you have any information regarding this case, please call 1-800-LOST.  That number again is 1-800-L-O-S-T..."